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Offline astarmathsandphysics

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Re: Poetry by the members!
« Reply #45 on: May 25, 2009, 06:33:25 pm »
One of my students is here now writing a poem. He is dagreengiant

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Re: Poetry by the members!
« Reply #46 on: May 25, 2009, 06:35:05 pm »
Tomorrow
What will it be?
How quickly shall
The hours pass
The minutes
The seconds,
How bright shall
the Sun beam
If at all,
In the cloudless heavens,
I want today
To ebb away
And bring new vigor
With a brand new day,
Come quickly
Come quickly
So that I can say,
Good Morrow!

Just a little poem I wrote- tell me what you think :)

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Re: Poetry by the members!
« Reply #47 on: May 25, 2009, 06:36:41 pm »
very very optimistic and nice!! Ill give it an 8 on 10 :D
oh churiyaan charha dey..
oh mehndiya kara dey..
oh jhanjara pawan dey...
On the dance floor oh mundiye...Nach Baliye!

--~*O yaara dhol bajaake.. O yaara jashan mana ke!!




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Re: Poetry by the members!
« Reply #48 on: May 25, 2009, 06:37:56 pm »
wicked poetry angel!!!
one who masters both the pen and paper is indeed a true warrior.

\m/metal head\m/

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Re: Poetry by the members!
« Reply #49 on: May 25, 2009, 06:39:30 pm »
@angel: ur poems r really really nice!! I think u should use them in a magzine or sumthin...


@dagreengiant: ok ur really good too, i liked ur poem...

actually guys i thought i know how to write poems but i found out after reading urs that i really suck!! lol!! ;D

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Re: Poetry by the members!
« Reply #50 on: May 25, 2009, 06:46:05 pm »
If I Had


What would have become
Of me,
If that, that was not,
Was?

If the feet turned right
Instead of left
If the mind had opted
To act!

What would have become of me?
And those
Who I now know,
If that which is,
Had not?

Like the wind upon my breast,
Or the Sun's powerful glare,
Would the day be the same
If they had not been there?

Ah but I ask,
Would we wish to change
To seep into mysteries unknown
When we may have chosen
The better of the two?

So I say
'Tis better to
Question not what may,
And live for today,
For what has gone
Be not half as exciting
As what's to come...


Again any comments or suggestions for improvement will be gratefully received :)

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Re: Poetry by the members!
« Reply #51 on: May 25, 2009, 06:46:22 pm »
everyone is good...each has a different way of expressing things!
Nobody suck~!
If i fall along the way pick me up and dust me off...and if i get too tired to make it..be my breath so i can walk!!

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Re: Poetry by the members!
« Reply #52 on: May 25, 2009, 06:47:18 pm »
This last one was really nice:) loads of potential! keep it up! :D
oh churiyaan charha dey..
oh mehndiya kara dey..
oh jhanjara pawan dey...
On the dance floor oh mundiye...Nach Baliye!

--~*O yaara dhol bajaake.. O yaara jashan mana ke!!




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Re: Poetry by the members!
« Reply #53 on: May 25, 2009, 06:53:29 pm »
astar says he can't understand any of my poetry :S :( lol

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Re: Poetry by the members!
« Reply #54 on: May 25, 2009, 06:56:36 pm »
It is true. I dont understand dagreengiants poetry.

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Re: Poetry by the members!
« Reply #55 on: May 25, 2009, 06:58:01 pm »
He is writing it now on my computer.

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Re: Poetry by the members!
« Reply #56 on: May 25, 2009, 07:01:11 pm »
astar says he can't understand any of my poetry :S :( lol

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Re: Poetry by the members!
« Reply #57 on: May 25, 2009, 07:05:26 pm »
astar says he can't understand any of my poetry :S :( lol

lool
If i fall along the way pick me up and dust me off...and if i get too tired to make it..be my breath so i can walk!!

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Re: Poetry by the members!
« Reply #58 on: May 25, 2009, 07:14:57 pm »
To all who dont know dagreengiant is a personal friend of robbie williams world famous pop star

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Re: Poetry by the members!
« Reply #59 on: May 25, 2009, 07:20:38 pm »
To all who dont know dagreengiant is a personal friend of robbie williams world famous pop star

are u serious ??

and is the police chase video on youtube ?  :P