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GossipGirl:

--- Quote from: Tohru Kyo Sohma on August 16, 2011, 06:56:32 pm ---thanks alot
my cousin also graded me 6/10
im try and improve on my essays
i'll be posting other essays soon and see the feedback on it.
u did ur AS right?which subjects?how was ur results?what grades did'ya get?

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You are welcome.
Yeah, just elaborate further and you'll bag those marks. ;D

No, i did my IGCSE's. The usual commerce subjects and the essential ones included. My result was good, Alhamdulilah but i won't disclose them.  :-[

Tohru Kyo Sohma:

--- Quote from: GossipGirl on August 16, 2011, 06:59:12 pm ---You are welcome.
Yeah, just elaborate further and you'll bag those marks. ;D

No, i did my IGCSE's. The usual commerce subjects and the essential ones included. My result was good, Alhamdulilah but i won't disclose them.  :-[

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oh...ok
i was press on it!

Dasith:

--- Quote from: Tohru Kyo Sohma on August 15, 2011, 03:31:47 pm ---ok...so im going to reset my business and economics exams in nov 2011
i'll be posting my essays and i want you people to grade me....and give remarks on my positive and negative points!

Qns.Outline the main benefits to the economy of your country of an increase in the number of new business start-ups made by enterprenuer? [10 marks]
Ans.Enterprenuer are the people who take risk to start-up a new venture their finance and business ideas.The economy of my country will be greatly benefited by a number of business start-ups by enterprenuers.These benefits include;
1.Many people will be employed by these new firms which will reduce unemployment.
2.More businesses leads to an increase in the number of goods produced.This will increase GDP and thus lead to economics growth.
3.More employment will improve the living standards of the citizens in my country.
4.Increased revenue to the Government from various forms of tax can lead to the provision of more public and merit goods.
5.There are chances that these new firms will enter the international market and compete.
6.Exports from these new firms chance improve balance of payments.
7.It will lead to increased social cohesion.



ok....so this was my answer.....my grade me and tell me where to improve! ;D


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i would give u 7,

u  r points seem to be fine , u might wanna discribe them a lil bit more , like how unemployment is reduced , & hw living standerds are improved etc
& u could say with increased business start ups more competition is created , so greater & efficient output with (possibly) cheaper prices may be available in market.

& also with more business startups there would be a boost / employment in other industries too , specially banking servises , because entrepreneurs may need to borrow money to start up businesses.

Less crime with , better living standerds.(a bit of a long shot but still possible :)   )

Investments from foreign countries + local investments.

less state production might be required


its better u add as much as points u can , u hav a better chance then

Tohru Kyo Sohma:

--- Quote from: Dasith on August 18, 2011, 06:31:24 am ---i would give u 7,

u  r points seem to be fine , u might wanna discribe them a lil bit more , like how unemployment is reduced , & hw living standerds are improved etc
& u could say with increased business start ups more competition is created , so greater & efficient output with (possibly) cheaper prices may be available in market.

& also with more business startups there would be a boost / employment in other industries too , specially banking servises , because entrepreneurs may need to borrow money to start up businesses.

Less crime with , better living standerds.(a bit of a long shot but still possible :)   )

Investments from foreign countries + local investments.

less state production might be required


its better u add as much as points u can , u hav a better chance then

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ahhh....i see....ok...will do!

~ Miss Relina ~:
okay may be I won't be able to check for you like the other pals  but..................I'll try to cooperate so that your answer would include more ideas  :-\
 :D well from my own experience in o-level business  writing in an essay-like way will improve your answer I think examiner will prefer paragraphs rather than bullet points as you can notice that the question is 10 marks

anyways I think you have included good ideas  and  they are subsequent too  :)
but I think that  this answer is lacking of ideas  :-\ due to 10 marks  so I would give you 7 marks for  seven ideas

 :) also one more point to say is if you can practice pastpapers and take ideas from markschemes  ;D ;D ;D



I'll post some websites  ;) ;)

http://www.bized.co.uk/search/node/start-ups%20%20business
http://www.articlesbase.com/entrepreneurship-articles/advantages-and-disadvantages-of-a-startup-business-151657.html

Hope for you best of luck  :D :D ;D

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