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Tohru Kyo Sohma:
ok...so im going to reset my business and economics exams in nov 2011
i'll be posting my essays and i want you people to grade me....and give remarks on my positive and negative points!
Qns.Outline the main benefits to the economy of your country of an increase in the number of new business start-ups made by enterprenuer? [10 marks]
Ans.Enterprenuer are the people who take risk to start-up a new venture their finance and business ideas.The economy of my country will be greatly benefited by a number of business start-ups by enterprenuers.These benefits include;
1.Many people will be employed by these new firms which will reduce unemployment.
2.More businesses leads to an increase in the number of goods produced.This will increase GDP and thus lead to economics growth.
3.More employment will improve the living standards of the citizens in my country.
4.Increased revenue to the Government from various forms of tax can lead to the provision of more public and merit goods.
5.There are chances that these new firms will enter the international market and compete.
6.Exports from these new firms chance improve balance of payments.
7.It will lead to increased social cohesion.
ok....so this was my answer.....my grade me and tell me where to improve! ;D
GossipGirl:
Okkay, firstly, remove the 7th point. The question is asking about the economy only. So changes in social behaviours do not fit in.
Secondly, is this your final answer or have you just listed the points of your answer ? Outlining doesn't simply mean that you need to point it out but you need to elaborate further. Because anyone can outline these points but the acer will be able to explain these point perfectly. So yes, some elaboration is required. Moreover, when you mention economic growth and GDP, you must explain what they are since the marker is a smart reader but doesn't have any knowledge. The rest is just fine.
I hope i was of some use. XD
Tohru Kyo Sohma:
--- Quote from: GossipGirl on August 16, 2011, 06:08:14 pm ---Okkay, firstly, remove the 7th point. The question is asking about the economy only. So changes in social behaviours do not fit in.
Secondly, is this your final answer or have you just listed the points of your answer ? Outlining doesn't simply mean that you need to point it out but you need to elaborate further. Because anyone can outline these points but the acer will be able to explain these point perfectly. So yes, some elaboration is required. Moreover, when you mention economic growth and GDP, you must explain what they are since the marker is a smart reader but doesn't have any knowledge. The rest is just fine.
I hope i was of some use. XD
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excellent suggestion
thanks alot GG
ur crooked 's sister,right?
tell crooked mimiswift got B in accounting,since he asked me to tell'em about my accounts grade.
i dont really see him in the forum anymore.
outline?i taught it just meant writing out the point.but ur concept is better since it is a 10 marks question,my answer must be a bit more long.
7 point removed?ok.
thanks alot GG
now,give my marking aswell since u read it...how much do i get out of 10?
GossipGirl:
--- Quote from: Tohru Kyo Sohma on August 16, 2011, 06:27:51 pm ---excellent suggestion
thanks alot GG
ur crooked 's sister,right?
tell crooked mimiswift got B in accounting,since he asked me to tell'em about my accounts grade.
i dont really see him in the forum anymore.
outline?i taught it just meant writing out the point.but ur concept is better since it is a 10 marks question,my answer must be a bit more long.
7 point removed?ok.
thanks alot GG
now,give my marking aswell since u read it...how much do i get out of 10?
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You're welcome. XD
erm, okkay. Will do. ;D
Congratulations for your result, by the way. :)
I am not much of a good marker but i'll try. I would give you a 5-6 out of 10 since you've only pointed out reasons but haven't given any explanations. Just elaborate a few lines for each point and you'll ace it, Insha Allah. ;D
Tohru Kyo Sohma:
--- Quote from: GossipGirl on August 16, 2011, 06:35:19 pm ---You're welcome. XD
erm, okkay. Will do. ;D
Congratulations for your result, by the way. :)
I am not much of a good marker but i'll try. I would give you a 5-6 out of 10 since you've only pointed out reasons but haven't given any explanations. Just elaborate a few lines for each point and you'll ace it, Insha Allah. ;D
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thanks alot
my cousin also graded me 6/10
im try and improve on my essays
i'll be posting other essays soon and see the feedback on it.
u did ur AS right?which subjects?how was ur results?what grades did'ya get?
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