Chingoo! I was hoping you'd post here since you're a literary genius.
Now my stalker is buttering me...I might be on your next iftari menu
@rickyponting66: I'd agree with Ari Ben Canaan--K.I.S.S. (Keep it short and simple). Your idea can be worked though and one way of doing that is flashbacks, like Dibss said.You could start either by showing the betrayed friend homeless and without a shelter, begging for money or involved in menial chores. Or, if you want it to be a little less dramatic you could just show him at an auction where his house and belongings are being sold out. Then he could recall how he had a friend Chappu (
) who spent his entire childhood with him and you guys graduated from school and college and university together. But you were always better than him in studies. So he started a business with you and behind your back transferred all the money in his accounts and got the hell out of there.
You could then come back to the present and have your main character open the letter which expresses the friend's grudge and jealousy for him.
Of course, this is one of the many approaches. It's a bit predictable and cliched in some areas, which I did on purpose so instead of just taking my idea you try to spice it up a bit.
There are a gazillion approaches to this question, so try to think outside the box. In the examination, almost 50% of the candidates will opt for the first few ideas they get. About 35% would push to the third or fourth idea--and a small majority of 15% will pick an idea almost unthinkable. Your task is to ideally be the 15% BUT since you have a time constraint, the 35% slot works just fine. Remember: practice makes perfect. Reading magazines, journals and novels would also help you learn how to express yourself better and how to make redundant ideas pop out. <3 Best wishes!
EDIT: Just realized you have already written the story.
Ain't I an idiot. Hope I helped anyhow