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Qualification => Others => TOEFL and IELTS => Topic started by: ~ A.F ~ on April 23, 2010, 09:30:22 pm
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Hey guys,
My TOEFL test is tomorrow, and this is the first/ only essay I have written. ;D lol
There might be loadz of typing errors as i didnt revise ;D
So basically, all I need is honest reviews and suggestions!
Thanks Everybody|!
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If I knew anything about the TOEFL...
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LOL this is just a normal essay
but thanks anyways sir!
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gd essay & gd luck :)
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Thanks T.Q :D
Off to my exams now :-X
Pray for me guys :-X
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Good Luck! :)
You'll do well...
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best of luck Amr!! ;)
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gd luck ;D
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Thanks Everybody! :D
Did awesome ;D ;D
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oh!..you finished your exam...
Sorry to late to say best of luck.. :( :(
so..how was it?
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oh!..you finished your exam...
Sorry to late to say best of luck.. :( :(
so..how was it?
lol its ok mate ;D
I did great! :D but it was so friggin boring! 5 hours! I have a swollen butt now :P lol
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Oops... I think am late, sorry. :-\
two groups; supporters and opposers.
Should use a colon : here. You are stating the two groups.
ridiculous, due to a myriad number of reasons.
No need for a comma (,). It gives the reader the impression smth is missing here, don't use the comma.
However, those who are in favor of this proposal, argue that smokers’ supports and arbitrary.
are* arbitrary?
who are in favor of banning smoke
smoking*?
Those who believe that this idea is will not affect the environment provided un-proved
That's quite confusing...
But the question remains; will ay party be convinced with the other’s thoughts?
Typo: any*
Suggestion:
You could end with a quote for a title like this. A good quotation will make your essay imposing. And will be stuck in the readers' mind for days...
For example, I had read something like this on the net:
"Smoking in a public place is like allowing a peeing section area in a swimming pool. It stinks! Would you swim there?"
"A cigarette is a tube with a fire at one end, and a fool at the other."
And there are many others... I fail to remember them all now. Just search for Smoking Quotes online. ;)
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thn alot but i guess ure a bit late :P ;D
but really app ur help :D
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Welcome... :)
And sorry for the belated answer. I wish I were here earlier, maybe could have helped effectively.
Sorry again.
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No really thank you alpha!
You are awesome! :D
+rep.
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You're welcome. :)
Hehe, but one thing... I wouldn't say you used a dictionary to write this essay. 99%, I would say, you used a thesaurus. ::) ;)
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loooool I assure you I used nothing but my astounding, glittering brain :P :P
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I got no assurance. :P
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hahaha
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You know, am not a teacher... but still, am not a fool. ;)
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lool I swaer I did it on my own >:( >:( >:(
I have good vocab >:( >:( >:(
Why so sure Alpha? >:( lol
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Ah okay... Cool. :)
Just noticed you did what most students tend to do: use far-fetched words to convey ideas that could have been explained better simply.
I didn't mean to offend. I was just trying to make you spill out the beans. ;)
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A.F is furious. :o :o :P
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>:( >:( >:( lool no um not :P
A.F was just kinda confused why alpha was so sure :P lol
everything's cool now 8) ;D
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Thank you... ;)
For not minding Alpha. :D
By the way, A. F. your picture is very nice. Formal. I read in one the threads SF was trying to find a logo. Time fails me, else would have helped.
But the picture you have is quite formal, the kind of appropriate logos. With a symbolic picture, you people will be able to get one perfectly reflecting the reason of the site's existence.
Just remember one thing:
Your logo should SPEAK. ;)
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i remember giving toefl.......
one of my worst 5hours of my life :P
ANNOYING :@
the headphones made my ears pain too..
something was wrong with my paper, and i had like more than 5 listening units / tapes..
lol, i was trying to go slow in listening and reading, so that i can hear what others are speaking in speaking, so i get the idea of the question before i see it......
i went soo slow that i was the last one to leave and i did not get any idea of speaking also by doing that.....
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haha true! the headphones were so annoying! >:( lol :P