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Title: can u write a good story??
Post by: ~Dazzling Star~ on October 19, 2010, 05:06:52 pm: i need someone to write me a story just for fun including any of 10 of the following words:
no wordcount can be as short as 1 line :P if u can do that with 10 words from:::
1,abash
2,aboriginal
3,abridge
4,abstain
5,acrimonious
6,acrid
7,acute
8,adept
9,adhere
10,adorn
11,adroit
12,adulation
13,aesthetic
14,affable
15,agrarian
16,aloof
17,altruistic
18,amend
19,amiable
20,allure

good luck!! :D :D
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Amelia on October 19, 2010, 05:19:19 pm: Well, ya. I'm a writer. But I aint in writing mood, atm. So i'll write... when.. my mood agrees with me.

P.S - I was planning to open a topic like this, myself :)
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Amelia on October 22, 2010, 12:36:15 am: Chapter 1

Year 1879, Victorian Era.
It could have been worse, couldn't it? Thank God, it's nothing worse...
The cold, ironically beautiful mansion was too damn frightening and the kitchen was accommodated with everything an unusual cook would dream of. I agree, I'm unusual but I aint a cook, so why the hell am I standing beside a cauldron brewing up the blood-red potion?
"I absolutely loathe this..and him," I muttered, throwing a clover leaf into the warm stone cauldron. The potion turned the blue-green color of the sea.
"What do you loathe about me, hinny?" said a husky voice in my right ear.I din't have to look up to see who it was. There was a time when my heart would nearly jump out of my chest out of fear of this voice. But not any more, I was used to it.
"Everything, my lord." I answered with resentment. My eyes averted from the hateful face.
But, ofcourse, it wasn't an easy task to offend the devil. Not even slightly abashed he barked a laugh and growled, "You are one nasty piece of work, gel."
"Hark who is talking," I said indicating hatred in each syllable, "Who is going to be your latest victim, my lord?" I continued, stirring the (now) magenta potion.
"That's none of your concern, gel." growled Than, the devil. "You can abridge the procedure of potion-making. I'm in a hurry."
"Yes, my lord"...

I'm too sleepy to continue, atm. It's a little longer then a one-line story but its definitely not gonna be like Harry Potter. :P
Whoever bothers to read, plz, post your feedback. I need encouragement. ;D
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Amelia on October 22, 2010, 09:46:20 pm: .. I poured the (now-prepared) Eros potion into the the flagon. Yes, I was truly unusual. A wife who prepares love potion to help her own husband - a devil - find himself girls who can satisfy his needs.
"My lady?"said Emily, my maid. A pretty, young Scottish girl.
"I have the flagon ready, Emily." I said, turning round to see her standing in the kitchen doorway, "Here, take it to your master."
"My lady," said Emily, lowering her gaze and twisting the hem of her apron, "Master insists that you take the flagon up to him. He's getting ready in the bed chamber."
"Very well, then." I said, sighing, "You are dismissed. Get yourself up to bed."
She bowed and left.
To call this house a mansion is an understatement but it wasn't a exactly a castle, either. Grand, yes. But desolate and aloof. A place of misery and sorrow..
I climbed the wide staircase and turned left to see the door of the bedchamber open-wide. The devil had no sense or shame at all. Why can't he close his door while changing?
"My lord?" I said, entering the beautiful bedchamber. He was standing beside the grand oak dressing table smiling at his reflection on the mirror.
"Ah, dearling." said Than, "thank you so much. How do I look?"
I had to raise my eyebrows at that, "You need to ask that, my lord? I think the mirror says it all."
"But," said Than, turning his back on the mirror and facing me, "I want to know your opinion, Catherine."
"Very handsome," said I. He was a devil but a extremely handsome one. If it wasn't for his surliness, he wouldn't have needed the Eros to make the girls surrender to his will. The black suit cldn't disguise the powerful muscles beaneath it. The ocean blue eyes and the auburn hair was sure a compliment.
A knock on the bedchamber door startled her out of her observation, "My lord," it was Andrew, the Butcher, "The carriage is waiting for you outside."
"Take care of your lady, Andrew." said Than, took the flagon out of my hand and walked out of the door...
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Amelia on October 24, 2010, 06:29:40 am: ...I sighed and shut the door of the bedchamber. It large window was open allowing the cool night wind to waft inside the chamber. The king-sized bed was adorned in black and bits of golden and so was the carpet and the walls. Yes, black. The colour of the devil.
But as I lied down on the large bed, I realized it was extremely comfortable. I could feel my sore mucles relaxing and my mind dizzy enough to filter out all thoughts and emotions.
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: iluvme on October 24, 2010, 12:43:19 pm: Quote from: Amelia on October 24, 2010, 06:29:40 am
...I sighed and shut the door of the bedchamber. It large window was open allowing the cool night wind to waft inside the chamber. The king-sized bed was adorned in black and bits of golden and so was the carpet and the walls. Yes, black. The colour of the devil.
But as I lied down on the large bed, I realized it was extremely comfortable. I could feel my sore mucles relaxing and my mind dizzy enough to filter out all thoughts and emotions.

One teensy correction. I lay down.
Go ahead author. ;) I'm enjoying this.
+ rep.
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Amelia on October 24, 2010, 04:48:04 pm: Ofcourse, what was i thinking? :-[
oh, ya. "omg test!! in 15 mins." :o this is what i was thinking. lolz
You read my work, that's compliment enough. Zanks. :)
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Amelia on October 29, 2010, 09:13:28 pm: Dear Readers,
Due to SF breakdown I wasnt able to post further chapters of this story.. but now, here it is!
....but filtering out memories and emotions wasnt an easy task.
Scottish lands are beautiful and fierce. My aboriginal country being England, it was hard to adapt to the cold Scotland. But I did adapt and learned to love this place. The only thing - person,more like, I hate is my own husband.
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Amelia on November 22, 2010, 06:18:25 pm: Chapter 2

I knew nothing about my mother except her name. My father, William Gaelic was probably the most acrimonious man alive on earth. Like all men, he had wanted a son. A couragious warrior. William was proud, arrogant and, wealthy. These attributes acquired him many enemies and the Gaelic palace was under constant threat of attack from the enemy clan. But William loved violence. He had adroit warriors and powerful weapons ready to initiate the war cry. I had no place in his life. Only during the moments when I accidently came into his view did he remember he was a father, too. But the look on his face when he saw clearly indicated that he would rather not be a father then to call me his child.

It was the night before my 14th birthday when I was summoned for the first time in my father's study.Even though, instincts told me that something was wrong my face broke up into a huge grin.
"I dont think that is the right reaction, Cathy. " I ignored my governess Susan's warning and galloped to the study.
Like every other room in the palace, Willaim's study was beautiful, the carpets and curtains were in rich burgundy. I passed the rows of hefty books and reached the office table where William was waiting for me.
"Father?" I said, all my glee was replaced by fear as I looked into his face which clearly stated nothing but pure fury.
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Amelia on November 22, 2010, 07:06:42 pm: I had my fathers height and lean structure but he was pale, blonde and blue eyed. And me; a dark brunette.
"What?" he said hoarsely, "Why are you here?" Only then, I noticed the tunkard of ale beside him. He was drunk. I sighed.
"You summoned me." I said.
I saw confusion flicker through his deep-blue eyes for a moment and then understanding dawned on him.
"Oh, yes," said William, "I wanted to inform you that tomorrow you will be sailing ashore to France with your maid. For your schooling. In that way you will be properly taken care of."

"France?" I said, breathless. I could feel my eyes stinging, "Why, Papa? Why so far? This place is my home."
"How dare you question me?" whispered William, it was worse then his shouting, "Yes, I have made a good decision. Manners will be your first lesson. You are dismissed. Leve me alone."

"Why?" I cried out in frustration, "Why do you hate me so much?"
He stood up so quickly that the chair toppled over. For a moment, I thought he was going to strangle me.
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Alpha on November 23, 2010, 03:28:09 am: Nice writing Amelia. ;)

I had already +repped you for it, and am gonna do it a second time, because you haven't given up the good job. :)
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Amelia on November 23, 2010, 05:36:45 am: Quote from: ~Alpha on November 23, 2010, 03:28:09 am
Nice writing Amelia. ;)

I had already +repped you for it, and am gonna do it a second time, because you haven't given up the good job. :)

Thank you. :) I'll post the next part tonight, iA.
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Ice_Frooog on November 23, 2010, 01:57:03 pm: nice 1 +rep to u amelia... ;D
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Amelia on November 23, 2010, 02:02:44 pm: Quote from: Ice_Frooog on November 23, 2010, 01:57:03 pm
nice 1 +rep to u amelia... ;D
Thanks :)
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Amelia on November 28, 2010, 05:37:05 am: (story cont.)

"You want to know why?" roared William, "Because you remind me of your mother! And I loathe her!"
"Why?" I whispered. I thought I heard someone behind the closed door of the study.
He took deep slow breaths to steady himself. "Our marriage," said William, "was a buisness contract. I wanted to marry the woman I wanted but then my own father was dying and I had to fulfill his last wish. "Marry, Fiona" he had said before he closed his eyes never to open them again."
"Your mother was a fine young woman, Cathy. But life was hard. We werent meant for each. Arguments broke out every other day and went over the roof. It was enough to make anyone crazy."
"And then you were born," he continued, rising his voice a little at a time. "The anger and disappointment nearly choked me. A girl? when I was so eagerly awaiting the arrival of a boy..." his voice trailed off. And he took a sip of his ale.
"But," I said,tears rolling down my eyes, my voice still a whisper, "I can be your son, Father. You can teach me how to fight. And then, I can dress up as a boy and accompany you to the numerous wars."
He gave me a sad smile, "I cant let you do that, hinny. You are a girl. A figure of adulation. Your duties are way more different and hefty."
I had stopped crying by then. And my mind was strangely clear. Maybe it was sorrow or curiosity but something was playing tricks with my mind. I could hear someone breathing, apart from me and William, someone outside the study door.
"But, Father." I insisted, "I can be your son and a lady."
"Easy said then done, hinny." said William, tonelessly.
I dont know what made me say it, " Father, I think there is someone outside. Eavesdropping on us"....
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Amelia on December 07, 2010, 09:05:42 am: "What?" he asked, confused.
"There is some one outside listening to every word we say, " I whispered, "I can hear them breathing."
William's eyes widened momentarily before he composed himself. He walked round the table towards the door and opened it.
And I was right. My maid, Elinor was standing outside the open door with a goblet in her hand.

"What are you doing here?" asked William, his voice was hoarse.

"My lord," said Elinor, "You to yet to take your medicine for the night."
"Keep it on the table and begone!" said William, "Go and prepare for your and Cathy's departure tomorrow."
Elinor walked forward in the room to keep the goblet on the study table, she spared me a sympathetic glance before bowing and then left the room.

William looked shaky. Was that curiosity in his eyes? "You could hear the woman breathing, gel?" asked William bewildered.
I nodded.
"But how could you?" whispered William, "She was so many feet further away."
"I dont know, father." was my reply.
"Very Well," said William, "I suggest you go up to bed. Go, now."
I dint need telling twice.
After a while, I closed and locked my bedroom door quietly behind me. And slumped on the bed to cry myself to sleep.
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Amelia on December 10, 2010, 06:19:20 pm: "My lady, wake up", I heard Elinor's voice break into my slumber mind, "We are running late."
I opened my eyes, "Running late?"
"Yes," said Elinor, I couldn't see her clearly, yet. The curtains were still closed. "We are sailing to France, don't you remember?"
I groaned, "Eliiii, Let me go back to sleep."
She yanked me out of the bed and pushed me towards the bathtub (that was set in the room.)

"My lady," said Elinor. She pulled open the curtains. Streak of sunlight broke in lighting up the room, "May I ask you something?"
"Ask," I said, my face dripping in cold water.
"How did you know I was eavesdropping on your conversation with the duke, last night?"
"I saw you, and I heard you."
"I dont understand."
"Let it be. The matter is not of the slightest concern."
"It is of the greatest concern! How could you hear and see me behind a closed d-?" Catherine dint let her complete the sentence
"Eli," I snapped, "Arent we running late now?"
"Oh," she said, blinking, "Oh, yes. Dressing you is a tedious task."
Catherine got up and walked serenly towards the dressing table.
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Amelia on December 22, 2010, 07:49:43 am: "You know what you have to do," said Catherine in a hushed voice, "Now, get a move on, old man."

"Are you sure, my lady?" frowned John.
"You have asked that a million times already", said Catherine frustrated, "Now do as I say!"
Looking wary, he proceeded to obey my command.
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Amelia on January 16, 2011, 11:59:51 pm: One of the house maids had come up behind me, " My lady, the carriage has arrived. His Grace is awaiting your arrival outside." I turned around and walked straight past her, without replying.

It was a pleasent day. The sky was a clear cloudless blue, the landscape stretched like emarald and the birds tuned a happy song. Cool breeze ruffled my hair and gown as I walked towards the waiting carriage... and my father.

"I'll not be travelling with you," he growled, "the footman will make sure that you and Emily reach the port safely. Captain Simpson will meet you there."
Catherine nodded.
"You look beautiful," said William, his expression was cynical, "It's absurd; the colour black seems to suit you best."
"Thank you, Father." I said, tonelessly.
"Better get inside the carriage," said William, "your trunks are already loaded; and ahh.. here comes Elinor."
The footman held the carriage door open as I climbed inside. Elinor was already seated opposite me.

"Is this the final good bye, father?" I asked abruptly leaning out of the carriage window to take a last look at him.

"You can visit if your husband allows too," said William with a cynical expression. He bowed us good-bye, before the footman whipped carriage horses and they galloped forward.
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Amelia on January 19, 2011, 07:48:46 pm: It took four hours to leave the charming country side of Dorsetshire and reach London; another hour ride to reach the sea port. By the the carriage came to a halt;the temperature had dropped considerably and the sun was about to say farewell for the day. I looked out the carriage window to see many ships of different sizes anchored at the harbour.
The footman came round to open the carriage door for us. "My lady, I'll carry your trunks to the ship. You'd better meet the Captain in the meanwhile."

"Which one is it?" I asked apprehensively. I was sore from sitting all those long hours, "The Captain and the ship, I mean."
He turned around and pointed, "The tall, dark man standing at the far end of the dock, my lady."

"Thank you," said Elinor, and then she turned to me, "Let's get a move on,"

"This is why I hate travelling," I complained, as Elinor helped me out of the carriage, "I'm so stiff, now."
Elinor simply patted my head.

"Good evening," said Captain Simpson pleasently as we approached, "You must be those charming ladies from Dorsetshire?" The man was young and tanned. He was good looking with his long black hair and straight nose.

Elinor nodded and said, "This is Lady Catherine Gaelic," (I bowed), "And I'm Elinor, her governess."

"Welcome aboard the Diamente , my ladies." said Simpson pointing to the large ship achored to our left,. The ship was humongous, painted white and beautiful," If you follow me, I'll take you to your cabin."
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Amelia on February 03, 2011, 03:05:33 pm: I have the most elegant cabin in the ship, or so the captain had said. Elinor was residing in the cabin next to mine. Having no interest whatsoever in our sojourn, I changed for the evening.

I was pinning up my long hair into an elegant coffiure, when the cabin door opened and Elinor came in talking. "Are you ready, dar -?" she stopped at midsentence when her eyes fell on me.

"My lady," said Elinor, "You look fetching."

I raised my eyebrow, and gave her a crooked smile, "Dont I always?"

She blinked, "Yes, child." smiled Elinor, "But today you look more like a woman then a girl in that evening gown of yours."

True, I thought as I looked once more in the mirror. Never before this had I dressed to be alluring and formal at the same time. Slender sphagetti straps uphold the fitted bodice of this gorgeous gown with the skirt flowing to the ground. I was wearing my mother's diamonds, and my coiffure was the best a woman can have.

"When are we setting sail, Eli?" I asked matter of factly.

"Soon after dinner." she said. "Which reminds me why I'm here in the first place. Dinner's to take place in the Captain's cabin. He has invited us to join him. Like we knew he would."

Sighing, I opened the small box on my dressing table and retrieved a folded piece of parchment.

"What is that?" Eli asked curiously.
"A letter for you," I said tonelessly, "But I want you to promise me that you will only open it after midnight." Preplexed she took the parchment, from my hand but asked no further question.

Simpson's cabin was a little larger then the one she was given but it was more elgeant. The smell of roast turkey had my stomach growling but overall it was a very sordid affair. The Captain wasn't as pleasent as I thought he was. With his bunch of questions and a sneer across his face.

"So, my lady," he said, turning around to look across the dining table at me, "Why, may I ask, have you decided to leave Britain?"
No, "To Marry, Captain." I said, contradicting my thoughts.

"Marry?" ventured Simpson, taking a sip of his brandy, "But you arent out of the school room, are you?" He spared a fleeting glance at Elinor.

I stiffened, surely a dinner conversation didnt revolve around a ladies personal life, "I am, indeed, out of the school room. Elinor is not only my governess, she's a good friend as well."

"I see..."
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: iluvme on February 04, 2011, 06:30:45 pm: Waiting......
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Locke Lamora on May 22, 2011, 12:10:16 am: hmmm... Amelia, will you continue?

And an itsy bitsy critique; the change in perspective from 1st person to 3rd person is a bit disorienting....
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Tohru Kyo Sohma on May 22, 2011, 12:35:18 am: wow....amelia.....u are the awesomest(i noe that's wrong :P)...writer ever.........u write soo good!!!keep on the good work!!
+rep ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Tohru Kyo Sohma on May 22, 2011, 12:53:45 am: i want the story to continue :( :'(
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Amelia on May 22, 2011, 03:44:51 pm: Quote from: iluvme on February 04, 2011, 06:30:45 pm
Waiting......

Your patience is great. ;D Sorry, girl, I forgot this thread even existed. :-[

Quote from: woteverr... on May 22, 2011, 12:10:16 am
hmmm... Amelia, will you continue?

And an itsy bitsy critique; the change in perspective from 1st person to 3rd person is a bit disorienting....

I'll continue, if you guys want me too. ::) And, ahem... I'll try to make it a bit more "orienting" :P

Quote from: mimiswift on May 22, 2011, 12:35:18 am
wow....amelia.....u are the awesomest(i noe that's wrong :P)...writer ever.........u write soo good!!!keep on the good work!!
+rep ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D

You flatter me,girl :D
There are better writer's, ofcourse (even in SF). It's just that I'm the only one writing. Thank you, nonetheless. ;)

Quote from: mimiswift on May 22, 2011, 12:53:45 am
i want the story to continue :( :'(

It'll continue, then. But you have to wait.. atleast, till the end of this month. ::) :P
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Tohru Kyo Sohma on May 22, 2011, 05:29:57 pm: okie!!!!i can wait.....i read alot of books and u are a really good one(writer ...that is... ;D)
:D :D :D :D :D
Title: Re: can u write a good story??
Post by: Locke Lamora on May 22, 2011, 05:53:22 pm: Quote from: Amelia on May 22, 2011, 03:44:51 pm
I'll continue, if you guys want me too. ::) And, ahem... I'll try to make it a bit more "orienting" :P

Cool. Of course, continue or start a new story....
And I don't care about your "orientation", just the story's... :P :P

till the end of May? Acceptable.....