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studiofix:
Hi all.
I am gonna write this paper on 25th of may. Actually I am re-sitting it

studiofix:
PLEASE ANYONE! RESPOND I NEED YOUR HELP

Nobody:
help is on the way, just wait a bit.

Alpha:

--- Quote from: studiofix on April 26, 2011, 12:17:42 am ---PLEASE ANYONE! RESPOND I NEED YOUR HELP

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Our syllabuses aren't the same but still, I'll try to help you as much as I can... but I'm letting you know in advance my time is very very limited. So, maybe I will be slow a bit.

Well, either you got the title wrong... or in your attempt to incorporate every aspect of discussion made you go quite irrelevant.
Only the third paragraph and your conclusion were relevant to me (for let me make it clear that GP examiners are sometimes subjective).
I got the impression it was a documentary, rather than a discussion.


>>> Consider the view that water is more important than oil.

If I were you, I would have discussed more which of the two are more important for human survival, in all the fields like you rightly had in mind.

General Paper is a paper designed to test your general knowledge about the world you're living in. Examiners keep that in mind while phrasing the essay questions.
Because the world resources are scarce, today, more than ever, people are fighting for water and oil. I would suggest you make more reference to that.


--- Quote ---Water was explored before oil. It is the very first mineral found on earth. Water makes anything on this world alive and feels fresh. There are many factors that can be listed and elaborated later on on this essay which will consist of five different categories such as: Health Benefits, Environmental factors, Affect on Earth, Hygienic terms. Further more, It is going to be explained and compared why is water more important than oil. It has a transparent colour yet with so many benefits.
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It's true that you have to announce the subject of your discussion in the introduction... but honestly, for me, the part in bold is a very unprofessional approach.

My teacher often tells us to start from general to specific... You could start by talking about resources, then natural resources, their depletion, etc. And then you come to oil and water, which are the two most important resources (since civilization). Also talk about the recent crises... About the depression of 2007-08, about depletion of currency reserves, etc. Consider the possibility: is there likely to be a trade-off between these two resources given the fact that they are indispensable in many fields? Nations are already fighting with each other for water and oil, even if they do not use the traditional means of doing so (i.e. weaponry, etc). Will they now be fighting between oil and water as financial resources get scarce?

You maybe will be thinking that in my suggested approach, there talks of economics and politics most. This is something you have to identify. Every essay will not necessary be covering all the umbrella terms, at the extreme, most of them. You would of course be talking about the scientific and technological, and social aspects as well... that will come later, in your paragraphs. The examiner can identify that-- you don't have to bring it out to him. Remark, you could have as well written "I am going to write an essay about..." You'd accept that in a GP paper?  ;)

I'll continue later. I gotta go now. Ponder about what I've written in the time being. :)

Alpha:

--- Quote from: Nobody on April 26, 2011, 01:45:31 am ---help is on the way, just wait a bit.

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Thanks to Nobody. :D

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